Trollslum Critique Thread
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08-11-2013, 01:58 AM
Post: #151
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RE: Trollslum Critique Thread
(08-10-2013 09:42 AM)HydraReaper Wrote: Be the obnoxious little thief. ![]() |
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08-11-2013, 04:23 AM
Post: #152
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RE: Trollslum Critique Thread
(08-10-2013 09:42 AM)HydraReaper Wrote: Okay so I don't have a proper sprite right now but Yani drew a picture of my troll. Here it is: http://i.imgur.com/DekT9pO.jpg Hah. Never expected to see me here again did you?
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08-11-2013, 05:03 AM
(This post was last modified: 08-11-2013 05:33 AM by HydraReaper.)
Post: #153
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RE: Trollslum Critique Thread
Response to ZeronFX's crit.
Response to Hayarp's crit. ------------------------- yani iS HORRIFYING silvy's victory d |
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08-11-2013, 06:59 AM
Post: #154
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RE: Trollslum Critique Thread
Woop double post sorry about that. Anyway. Edited the profile, wee!
----------------------------------- Be the obnoxious little thief. i dont know what obnoxious means but im not a thief! Instead, be the social kleptomaniac. i guess thats okay for now ------------------------- yani iS HORRIFYING silvy's victory d |
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08-12-2013, 04:34 PM
Post: #155
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RE: Trollslum Critique Thread
![]() Your name is ANAWAR CELISE and you wish you were at a party right now. tl;dr Name: Anawar Celise Age: 6.5 Sweeps Gender: Female Height: 5'3" Blood Color: [REDACTED] (types in #777777) Trolltag: incognitoIllumination Quirk: adds hashtags to the end of her sentences Lusus: Firemom (Firefly) Specibus: glowstckKind Modus: popularity Hah. Never expected to see me here again did you?
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08-12-2013, 04:47 PM
Post: #156
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RE: Trollslum Critique Thread
(08-12-2013 04:34 PM)Hayarp Wrote: In red, diggity dawg.
Where we're going we don't need fancherubs
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08-12-2013, 05:05 PM
Post: #157
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RE: Trollslum Critique Thread
![]() Your name is ANAWAR CELISE and you wish you were at a party right now. tl;dr Name: Anawar Celise Age: 6.5 Sweeps Gender: Female Height: 5'3" Blood Color: [REDACTED] (types in #777777) Trolltag: incognitoIllumination Quirk: adds hashtags to the end of her sentences Lusus: Firemom (Firefly) Specibus: glowstckKind Modus: popularity updated. Hah. Never expected to see me here again did you?
[Roleplaying Tumblr] ![]() floaties by overlard! |
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08-15-2013, 04:20 PM
Post: #158
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RE: Trollslum Critique Thread
![]() Your name is RYAMBA ZURKET and boy do you love training to be a junior LAUGHSASSIN. Culling lowblooded criminals (or just lowbloods, your research into who is criminal is pretty shoddy to begin with and Alternia is not renown for it's file keeping) in the dead of night and leaving no trace, well most of the time you leave no trace, sometimes you get a little stab happy and splash blood all over the place. It doesn't really matter though it's not like there are droves of detectives looking to cover lowblood hive crime scenes. Anyways besides going out and "abusing" as some would like to call it, your highblood status you spend your free time practicing the not-really-forgotten-but-not-brought-up-in-casual-conversation art of FLASH STEPPING, honing your body until you can move so fast you literally vanish from view, too bad even your inherent strength doesn't afford you enough stamina to do it more than a few feet at a time so you usually kept that move in reserve to impress and/or intimidate the pitiful lower castes. You are also, of course, a master with your blind cane, yes you almost forgot to mention you are BLIND, not by your choosing but thanks to those drunk bastards the SUBJUGGALATORS who delivered their rejection notice from the Mirthful Cult personally when you refused to drink their stupid fucking soda pop. Apparently a rejection notice from them is getting stabbed, in the face. Irony at it's finest, but you adapted and the LAUGHSASSINS, her IMPERIOUSNESS' most dastardly of ne'er do-wells were more than happy to take you in so now you secretly wish to kick every subjuggalator in the face but you certainly won't tell that to anybody otherwise you'll have their baggy-pant'd ass on you in no time and they wouldn't stop until you were dead. Name: Ryamba Zurket Blood colour/Hex: Indigo 2F025C Gender: Female Age: 6 Sweeps TrollTag: deadLaughing Quirk: Haha, She begins with, Heehee, and interrupts with laughter, she also, Hoo hoo, the end. Keke. Strife Specibus: canebladeKind Fetch Modus: Ouija board Lusus: Hydramom Interests: Laughing, Knifeplay, training to be a Laughsassin *God Tier: Maid of Doom *Game Land: Land of Pillows and Slumber |
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08-15-2013, 04:32 PM
(This post was last modified: 08-15-2013 04:36 PM by Yaridovich23.)
Post: #159
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RE: Trollslum Critique Thread
![]() Critique in red. |
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08-15-2013, 05:18 PM
Post: #160
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RE: Trollslum Critique Thread
(08-15-2013 04:20 PM)technoGender Wrote:"Well, I like this character from the old cafe. But, for someone who knows nothing about the character this gives a neat glimpse into their backstory but nothing about their personality or what they do other than being a laughsassin. Elaborate on her knife play. It's an interest of mine actually. At least before my balisong broke, I still like to practice with my chef's knife however. Tell us more about who she is and not what she does Mention her hemospectrum and strangers attitude clearly for other RPers to see and know in advance for cafe meshing." The only important quote ever. Thanks to Silvy.
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08-15-2013, 06:38 PM
(This post was last modified: 08-15-2013 06:45 PM by technoGender.)
Post: #161
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Edited and Spoiler'd for your Convenience.
![]() Name: Ryamba Zurket Blood colour/Hex: Indigo 2F025C Gender: Female Age: 6 Sweeps TrollTag: deadLaughing Quirk: Haha, She begins with, Heehee, and interrupts with laughter, she also, Hoo hoo, the end. Keke. Strife Specibus: canebladeKind Fetch Modus: Ouija board Lusus: Hydramom Interests: Laughing, Justice, training to be a Laughsassin *God Tier: Maid of Doom *Game Land: Land of Pillows and Slumber |
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08-15-2013, 07:54 PM
(This post was last modified: 08-15-2013 07:59 PM by The Necromancer.)
Post: #162
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RE: Edited and Spoiler'd for your Convenience.
(08-15-2013 06:38 PM)technoGender Wrote: "A lot better but It could use some formatting. Check out some other troll profiles and look for way to break your profile out of the WALL OF TEXT and into a visually pleasing display of one's character." The only important quote ever. Thanks to Silvy.
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08-16-2013, 07:52 AM
Post: #163
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Electric Boogaloo 2: Pleasing To The View (hopefully)
![]() Name: Ryamba Zurket Blood colour/Hex: Indigo 2F025C Gender: Female Age: 6 Sweeps TrollTag: deadLaughing Quirk: Haha, She begins with, Heehee, and interrupts with laughter, she also, Hoo hoo, the end. Keke. Strife Specibus: canebladeKind Fetch Modus: Ouija board Lusus: Hydramom Interests: Laughing, Justice, training to be a Laughsassin *God Tier: Maid of Doom *Game Land: Land of Pillows and Slumber |
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08-16-2013, 01:14 PM
Post: #164
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RE: Electric Boogaloo 2: Pleasing To The View (hopefully)
(08-16-2013 07:52 AM)technoGender Wrote: "Looks better and easier to read now. Let me do some nitpicking that you can take it or leave it." The only important quote ever. Thanks to Silvy.
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08-19-2013, 02:00 PM
(This post was last modified: 08-19-2013 03:56 PM by Syvar.)
Post: #165
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RE: Trollslum Critique Thread
Hello again, friends! It's been a while. Let's see if you guys can help me polish this turd.
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09-03-2013, 09:35 AM
(This post was last modified: 09-03-2013 09:40 AM by Overnightfuture.)
Post: #166
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RE: Trollslum Critique Thread
![]() You are now Tritis Raeked a 7 sweep old Redblood that really needs to slow down. On trollian you go by consistentCrashing and when not Imitating other trolls you Talk on the beat And always end your Sentances with a double Kick.. |
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02-15-2014, 11:39 AM
(This post was last modified: 02-15-2014 11:44 AM by GM_3826.)
Post: #167
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RE: Trollslum Critique Thread
==> Be the Crazy One
![]() ![]() -->-oh, yeah! while that c-ould describe a MILLI-ON tr-olls, I d-on't think it fits ANY-ONE better than me! >8D<-- |
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07-01-2014, 03:42 PM
(This post was last modified: 07-01-2014 03:56 PM by ZeronFX.)
Post: #168
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RE: Trollslum Critique Thread
It's been a long time, but the crit thread is now back in business. I'll take care of the last two, even if they don't need to be taken care of.
(09-03-2013 09:35 AM)Overnightfuture Wrote: (02-15-2014 11:39 AM)GM_3826 Wrote: ==> Be the Crazy One My critiquing magics have ravaged these works. I now apparently crit in this color. |
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07-05-2014, 08:39 AM
(This post was last modified: 07-05-2014 08:52 AM by Hi-toppin.)
Post: #169
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RE: Trollslum Critique Thread
Hello! I'm new here and I would love it if someone could give my girl a look. I think I got everything, but I'm not sure about how well it flows and if everything is 100% on par. Thank you for your time!
==> Be the brownblood with a love for digging. ![]() |
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07-05-2014, 11:32 AM
Post: #170
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RE: Trollslum Critique Thread
Hey there! We're always glad to see new faces around here. Most discussion nowadays takes place on a group Skype chat. If you'd like to be a part of it, PM me for more information.
(07-05-2014 08:39 AM)Hi-toppin Wrote: Hello! I'm new here and I would love it if someone could give my girl a look. I think I got everything, but I'm not sure about how well it flows and if everything is 100% on par. Thank you for your time! I cast a spell of critique on thee! |
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07-05-2014, 12:56 PM
(This post was last modified: 07-05-2014 01:01 PM by Hi-toppin.)
Post: #171
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RE: Trollslum Critique Thread
Let's try to get those minor crits taken care of!
==> Be the brownblood with a love for digging. ![]() |
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07-05-2014, 03:07 PM
(This post was last modified: 07-05-2014 03:08 PM by ZeronFX.)
Post: #172
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RE: Trollslum Critique Thread
Come back for round 2, eh? I will not be so kind this time around. im totally joking im only here to help
(07-05-2014 12:56 PM)Hi-toppin Wrote: Let's try to get those minor crits taken care of! And the Lord ZeronFX didst return to the thread, and His congregation gasped, for they thought him finished with the profile. And the Lord spoke with a great voice, and He said: 'Looks good.' |
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07-07-2014, 12:56 PM
(This post was last modified: 07-07-2014 01:00 PM by Hi-toppin.)
Post: #173
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RE: Trollslum Critique Thread
==> Be the vain fishgirl
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07-07-2014, 01:38 PM
Post: #174
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RE: Trollslum Critique Thread
I'm on the case,
(07-07-2014 12:56 PM)Hi-toppin Wrote: ==> Be the vain fishgirl You have found yourself in a critique charm! ![]() |
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07-09-2014, 11:22 AM
(This post was last modified: 07-09-2014 04:56 PM by ZeronFX.)
Post: #175
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RE: Trollslum Critique Thread
Well, here goes.
> Be the masked vigilante. Let us n<o>t. > Be the travelling salesman. Go---od. I prefer this better. ![]() Your name is VICAXE OBSURA, and you're a bit of a drifter. ![]() |
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07-10-2014, 02:26 AM
(This post was last modified: 07-10-2014 12:19 PM by Hi-toppin.)
Post: #176
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07-10-2014, 11:55 AM
(This post was last modified: 07-10-2014 11:55 AM by ZeronFX.)
Post: #177
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RE: Trollslum Critique Thread
(07-10-2014 02:26 AM)Hi-toppin Wrote: [quote='ZeronFX' pid='68456' dateline='1404865331'] You know the drill. ![]() |
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07-14-2014, 12:33 PM
(This post was last modified: 07-15-2014 09:11 AM by Hi-toppin.)
Post: #178
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RE: Trollslum Critique Thread
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07-15-2014, 08:20 AM
Post: #179
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RE: Trollslum Critique Thread
(07-14-2014 12:33 PM)Hi-toppin Wrote: [Statement that involves some variation on magic and crit being in orange text] ![]() |
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07-16-2014, 10:24 AM
(This post was last modified: 07-16-2014 10:27 AM by Yaridovich23.)
Post: #180
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07-18-2014, 11:13 AM
(This post was last modified: 07-18-2014 11:26 AM by ZeronFX.)
Post: #181
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RE: Trollslum Critique Thread
> Be the mad scientist.
that's not, |_|h, right at all. > Be the ornery chemist. hmm, thank you. ![]() Your name is BRIKAH SANZOH, and you're a single bad event from flipping the fuck out. ![]() |
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07-20-2014, 10:17 AM
Post: #182
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04-29-2015, 10:46 AM
(This post was last modified: 04-29-2015 10:46 AM by Yaridovich23.)
Post: #183
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RE: Trollslum Critique Thread
Incomplete Sprite:
Name: Protus Polybo. Blood colour/Hex: #6a005b Gender: Male. Age: 9 Sweeps. TrollTag: aquaticCoxswain. Quirk: Will sometimes have a ' after a vowel. Strife Specibus: cutlassKind. Fetch Modus: Treasure Map: A coded treasure map appears, which must be decoded to get the wanted object. Lusus: Krakenpop. Interests: Going on dangerous adventures, collecting weapons, deciphering hints of your Ancestor, doing drugs getting rich. |
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04-29-2015, 10:59 AM
Post: #184
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RE: Trollslum Critique Thread
(04-29-2015 10:46 AM)Yaridovich23 Wrote: Incomplete Sprite: Hit and crit it. ![]() |
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05-10-2015, 11:29 AM
Post: #185
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RE: Trollslum Critique Thread
[NO SPRITE YET]
TL;DR Name: Berlak Hautes. Blood colour/Hex: #000056 Gender: Male. Age: 9 Sweeps. TrollTag: sturdyPaladin. Quirk: Replaces "c" with "ck" as part of a speech impediment. Strife Specibus: swordKind. Fetch Modus: Dummy Lusus: Scaledad. Interests: Training, collecting weapons and armor, sparring, smithing. |
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05-10-2015, 12:58 PM
Post: #186
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RE: Trollslum Critique Thread
(05-10-2015 11:29 AM)Yaridovich23 Wrote: [NO SPRITE YET] Looks like it checks out, yo. Maybe I'm losing my touch here? You might want another person's rad second opinion, know what I'm sayin', bro-yo-ma? ![]() |
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05-26-2015, 07:36 AM
(This post was last modified: 05-26-2015 07:39 AM by Hi-toppin.)
Post: #187
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RE: Trollslum Critique Thread
==> Be the psionic metal-head
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05-26-2015, 08:06 AM
(This post was last modified: 05-26-2015 08:08 AM by ZeronFX.)
Post: #188
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RE: Trollslum Critique Thread
(05-26-2015 07:36 AM)Hi-toppin Wrote: ==> Be the psionic metal-head Jammin' memes, bro. Also, for whatever reason, Chocopi has given me a selection of smilies beside the editor, so who am I to let them go to waste? ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() |
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05-30-2015, 03:59 PM
(This post was last modified: 06-01-2015 04:29 PM by phantomEclipse.)
Post: #189
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RE: Trollslum Critique Thread
==>Be the Alternian Butcher (i dont really have any other pictures to use, oh well)
![]() It's time to, T-T-T-T-T-T TRIPLE POST |
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06-01-2015, 11:01 AM
Post: #190
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RE: Trollslum Critique Thread
(05-30-2015 03:59 PM)phantomEclipse Wrote: ==>Be the Alternian Butcher (i dont really have any other pictures to use, oh well) He seems fine mostly, other than the fact that his views on the Hemospectrum weren't stated. Actually, his blood color isn't really stated at all unless I just missed it. I'm assuming it's olive/green? ![]() |
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06-01-2015, 02:09 PM
Post: #191
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RE: Trollslum Critique Thread
it's the color of his glasses, and his view on the hemospectrum is he doesnt care
It's time to, T-T-T-T-T-T TRIPLE POST |
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06-01-2015, 03:04 PM
Post: #192
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RE: Trollslum Critique Thread
Alright, you may want to state both of those things somewhere in his bio. He's all clear from my point of view.
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06-01-2015, 04:29 PM
Post: #193
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RE: Trollslum Critique Thread
Done
It's time to, T-T-T-T-T-T TRIPLE POST |
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06-11-2015, 04:23 AM
Post: #194
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RE: Trollslum Critique Thread
==> Be the hippie daywalker
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